Once upon a time, there was a prince that was called Thunder. He didn't like being prince; he always had to follow the rules to be a good prince so that his little brother Leo would follow. one day when his dad went to war and Thunder was at the castle a note arrived. a falcon was carrying it. Thunder couldn't open notes so he gave it to the king's loyal adviser Joshua the 111 or just Josh. He opened the note and rushed to the middle of the kingdom everybody in the kingdom including Thunder and his brother. After everybody in the kingdom came Joshua announced that the king was dead. ...There was silence then Leo started crying Thunder only a little because he was in public. Joshua said since the king's death the crowning of the new king will be held tomorrow midday and the death of the king will tomorrow afternoon. So after that everybody went to their homes and Thunder and Leo went back to the castle when they arrived Joshua asked Thunder are you ready to be king Thunder is it okay to surrender the crown to my little brother Joshua said yes but you will be banished for 5 years and cannot come until that ban is done. Joshua said he wants to take that risk and give up the crown to Leo. Leo was only one younger than Thunder he was 11 and that was an age that could take up the throne so Joshua said ok to this but advised thunder to take the throne. But thunder said no he wants to see how the world looks like. The next morning thunder was banished and Leo said goodbye so did the kingdom after that Thunder met a nice dude called floppy was wowed that he was in the former king's presence floppy asked if he could be his Squier and so a great friendship was formed.
THE END
Hi Ashton,
ReplyDeleteI want to know more!!! Why was it that Thunder didn't want to be king? Was his younger brother a good person? Or will he turn out to be a dastardly King? I can't wait to see whether part two follows the new king or Thunder!
If I had been a boy, my name would have been "William the third".
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DeleteHey Ashton great creativity, you have got an excellent storyline that could go anywhere. I felt like you could of introduced Leo a little more clearly than....then Leo started crying..... it wasn't until later we found out that Leo was Thunders little brother.Also re-read your story and check for any errors that you might be able to improve upon.Im off to read part 2...... Stay awesome.
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