If I had the power to create any potion in the world I would create the potion to raise the dead military and make them work for me. I would also use this power to make a world peace potion and a potion to have all the powers in the world.
Sick sentences!
These sentences are ‘sick’ and need help to get better. Can you help? He flicked the flask. It had a red
liquid inside. It bubbled. The room was smoky.
My version.
He flicked the flask into the air and weird liquids started pouring out of the flask and onto the desk and the floor.
Kia ora Ashton,
ReplyDeleteI'm intrigued to see what the picture prompt was now! (Maybe next time you could include it in your post?) A World Peace Potion would be a fantastic idea. Imagine how different the lives of some people in the world would be.
When you are looking at the Sick Sentences, think about how you could either expand them (stretch them out with descriptive language) or compound them (join sentences together with a connecting word). Treat words lie weeds, they need to really work hard to deserve to be there so be careful they are not just there to make the writing longer.